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Cyrus, the Tragedy
« on: February 14, 2011, 06:50:14 pm »
Okay, I couldn't really think of a better name. Was free this evening and heard The Highwayman, and loving it so I sort of stole was influenced by the song to write this. Could use some improvements, but bleh, this was my only free evening for a month perhaps.



The sun's fading ember disappeared beyond twilight.
But the moon reigned over darkness; Oh, blessed the sliver light!
The winds announced his coming over the luscious hill
And the Hero came home riding,
Riding, riding,
The Hero came home riding, and called into her window-sill.

He'd a Guardian helm on his forehead, a medal adorned his chest,
Fair of skin and manner, and the Kingdom's very best;
But his eyes were bright with passion, eclipsing the armor's shine.
He walked with a jewelled twinkle,
His wedding ring a-twinkle,
He spread his arms warmly and sang to his love divine.

Who should be waiting in the window, but the damsel of his dream.
For her brown hair and twinkling eyes he held a great esteem.
Said he, “Beloved Eve, the end of war is nigh!
Then yours I'll be by moonlight,
Watch for me by the moonlight,
I'll come to thee by the moonlight, though wrathful heavens defy!”

He held her hand in his and in love her fingers he kissed,
Then followed the ring to her finger, then followed a blush so missed,
She nuzzled his hand in longing, though war weighed in dismay;
She held her heart awaiting,
'Twas her love awaiting,
For the Hero's return in the moonlight, who stole her heart away.

Into a moonless night howled a fest of malicious craves:
Demons shook their ashes, rising from the graves!
Blood stream'd a river of the fallen, brave and bold;
Yet battle a march of men,
Sir Cyrus and Squire Glenn,
Tore past the darkness and challenged the sinister wold.

At the heart of it stood Magus, the King that sin demands,
Clutched his scythe like a reaper, the Black Winds at his commands;
But Cyrus tore through his magic, his holy sword a-glow!
Thus death feared a savior,
Thy hero, the savior,
And Cyrus braved all danger to deal evil a final blow.

The moon had shown from its hiding with the hero's eyes ablaze,
The night was almost won, and yet, to Magus it did not faze.
And with a strike of sheer will, he attacked the hero's thrust,
The fatal spell charred him,
Singed him, burned him,
The sword shattered in the moonlight, and Cyrus burned to dust...

Dawn broke all through the kingdom, yet her husband did not come.
Tears ran down her cheek as Eve awaited with melancholy hum.
Cold, on the stroke of morn, hours crawled by like years,
Her heart was torn asunder,
Her soul was torn asunder,
Ceaseless she waited for the Hero, untill only him she hears.

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Re: Cyrus, the Tragedy
« Reply #1 on: February 15, 2011, 02:53:34 am »
Very enjoyable to read. It's absolutely lovely.

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Re: Cyrus, the Tragedy
« Reply #2 on: February 15, 2011, 02:40:26 pm »
I loooooove it!

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Re: Cyrus, the Tragedy
« Reply #3 on: February 15, 2011, 05:02:17 pm »
Ahh, I love that song! I read along to your poem as I heard it and it matches the musicality of the original nicely.

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Re: Cyrus, the Tragedy
« Reply #4 on: February 15, 2011, 05:36:21 pm »
I actually tried to do the same and found it quite hard to read while the other lyrics were sung, but without the music, it's actually really nicely written and enjoyable.

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Re: Cyrus, the Tragedy
« Reply #5 on: February 16, 2011, 06:48:36 am »
I actually tried to do the same and found it quite hard to read while the other lyrics were sung, but without the music, it's actually really nicely written and enjoyable.
XD Girls naturally excel at reading/taking in info and multitasking while guys are best at processing it. It's the way our brains are wired, which rings true to the saying they're intellectually two years older than males of the same age.

Thanks, guys! :D I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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« Reply #6 on: February 27, 2011, 11:50:01 pm »
I'd say they're pretty equal skills, but yes, multitasking is not my forte.

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Re: Cyrus, the Tragedy
« Reply #7 on: February 28, 2011, 12:17:16 pm »
Haha multitasking is nobody's forte! In fact, to maintain creative intelligence I highly discourage multitasking, because it's the only thing that makes you worse with more practice.

Nevertheless, I think you might be interested in this. XD
http://www.cerebromente.org.br/n11/mente/eisntein/cerebro-homens.html

Okay, back to the topic, I'll be writing more poetry in my spare time: either at work, when I have nothing to do, or after my eProjects. So far I've done Magus, Schala, Lynx, Setzer (FF6) and Cyrus.

Hah something tells me I should write lyrics for Through the Dark!

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Re: Cyrus, the Tragedy
« Reply #8 on: February 28, 2011, 01:57:05 pm »
That article was pretty good, but I have to bring this up whenever gender differences come into the discussion:
http://www.amazon.com/Delusions-Gender-Society-Neurosexism-Difference/dp/0393068382

The moral of that story is that neuroplasticity trumps all.  :kz

Just a friendly reminder!

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« Reply #9 on: February 28, 2011, 02:21:12 pm »
I'm not a huge fan of the article, honestly. Anything that says "men are better than women at X" and "women are better than men at Y" is inaccurate and limiting. Saying definitely that "women" appreciate an aesthetically beautiful piece of art more than "men" implies that any particular woman would appreciate it more than any particular man. Being a guy who's not exactly big and manly, I feel like that's bollocks. Maybe they're statistically more likely to appreciate said art, but to say so black and white "Women like this more, PERIOD!" is pretty close-minded. I just wish the way they presented their actual results was a bit more... scientific, and less... jump-to-conclusiony.

To be fair, they do touch on how they came to these broad generalizations, but only in the last paragraph of the entire article, and only so they could say these findings aren't inherently sexist. A nice find, anyway, tushantin.
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Re: Cyrus, the Tragedy
« Reply #10 on: February 28, 2011, 02:58:21 pm »
The moral of that story is that neuroplasticity trumps all.  :kz
Indeed!  8) Who cares if they say if men are better at science or women are better at artistic and linguistic skills than men? Despite my childhood dyslexia, I won't abandon my love for writing, art and poetry.

And thank you for the link to the book. I'll take a look at it soon.

@Bekkler: Sorry, I didn't want to agitate you. Also, it was a certified scientific analyses through which I've learned the neurological/evolutionary differences between genders; this is just a reference article I found today at work. Nevertheless, those who think that human minds are incapable of improving are delusional, because if that was the case why would the Springtime of Youth even exist? (Well it'd still exist, considering our role is doing the impossible and seeing the invisible)

Personally, though, I support difference and inequality, but not for the superiority/inferiority factor. If everyone were the same and had the same opinion the world would be one-dimensional and boring, advancing at a very slow and lifeless pace, easy to target and destroy. But we're unique (just like everyone else). Think of it this way: religion, no matter how weird, pertains to morality, and atheism pertains to rationality. Their differences make them war and annihilate themselves, and then a Pantheist like Einstein comes in and tells them this:
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Science without religion is lame, religion without science is blind

A Pantheist ties morality and rationality, religion and atheism together; he sees what lies between light and darkness and tries to exploit the treasures hiding between them. He may not be better than either the religious or the atheist, but he reminds them to watch each others' backs, because each person can only see in one direction. Men and women, light and darkness, religion and atheism, innocence and guilt; they're all two sides of the same coin. Two minds are better than one.

So remember, be different and be proud of it. You are a key in one big puzzle of the universe.  :) You have something that nobody else does, so don't let go of your dreams and ambitions, and one day there will be people in your lives that will be grateful that you were there with that dazzling aura to bring them light.
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Re: Cyrus, the Tragedy
« Reply #11 on: February 28, 2011, 03:40:27 pm »
Oh I know I'm different than a lot of people, but I just don't like when people try to define others in all-encompassing generalizations. The last girl I dated tended to generalize in a pretty annoying way, as a form of argument in lieu of actual facts or examples.
Example: "Everybody's mad at me." "You ALWAYS say that." "They never do anything." There are few, if any appropriate times for these sentences to be said. Always, Never, Everyone, Nobody, Men, Women. I try to be careful in my everyday conversation to avoid that kind of stuff. We went out three nights in a row to different restaurants, movies, and what have you, then the fourth night we stayed in and she said "we never go anywhere". I hate that shit.

You didn't agitate me. It was those damn SCIENTISTS! Alleged scientists. Haha.

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Re: Cyrus, the Tragedy
« Reply #12 on: February 28, 2011, 04:12:04 pm »
Alleged scientists. XD Now you're talking.

I'm sorry, I wasn't trying to generalize everyone, but I get your point. Human mind is complex, and at times just so simple, and some people just don't understand this. Now we wouldn't wanna generalize them into the narrow-minded category either; it's human nature. Absolute truth is often so chaotic that people interpret it in their own way, often missing out some aspects that perhaps someone else understands, which in turn causes difference of opinion. And in the end, everyone wants the absolute answer to their dilemma and when they don't get any they assume things from what they know. Just how blaming someone illogically makes us feel good in desperate times, even though it's not a good solution.

People generalize for simplicity's sake, because human mind is still at a developing stage. When you explain nuclear physics to an average Joe he'd stare at you without understanding a word you've said, but when you simply speak your point, "Nuclear bombs are dangerous, BUT will provide you power". That's when you're talking their language!  :D

I've encountered many similar people in real life, and as much as I find them annoying I don't hate them for it, because in some cases they're better than me at something else. I'm only angered when they think know what they're doing and yet aren't willing to learn (to me, intelligence means capability to learn and adapt, not how much you know), and when they destroy their dreams as they reach adulthood, with a misconception that it's a child's imagination or fool's illusion just because they didn't choose to try.

But then again it's not their fault; it's all hard wired into the genes. Get all the good stuff with least efforts. Unless our experiences override our genes we'd still remain sleeping in ignorance, and fire can't be conjured in void space. Chances of people being enlightened are directly proportional to someone or something grabbing their collars and shaking them awake. So I suppose we're lucky to understand these things first.

Of course, all that still doesn't excuse the way your last date treated you. She has no right to do that, because she never bothered to understand you properly. Hell, I think you deserve someone way better!  :wink: Plus, being a musician gives you better chances at beautiful women than any of us. I salute you, man!



EDIT: Ah, Christ, not again! I've ruined yet another good thread. >< I really don't know how this keeps happening. Sheesh! Sorry about that!
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