This is all I would change. Just a few words here and there really, let me know what you think.
I can't wait to see if all this fits in the game.
{Queen Zeal}: The Black Omen flows above all timelines,{line break}
awaiting the day the almighty Lavos will awken!{page break}
Your destiny led you here, and here you will remain for{line break}
eternity, unless you can defeat me and destroy the Black Omen!{full break}
to
{Queen Zeal}: The Black Omen trancends time,{line break}
awaiting the day the almighty Lavos will awken!{page break}
Your destiny led you here, and here you will remain for{line break}
eternity!{page break}
...unless you think you can defeat me and destroy
the Black Omen!{full break}
. . .
{Queen Zeal}: Come, children of this world! I shall lure{line break}
you into the midst of Lavos' slumber...into an enternal{line break}
black dream!{full break}
to
{Queen Zeal}: Come forth, children of this world! I shall lure{line break}
you into the heart of Lavos' slumber...into an enternal{line break}
nightmare!{full break}
. . .
(I didn't bother to put the un-modified version of this)
{Queen Zeal}: Disgusting worms...I am the queen who will{line break}
rule this world eternally together with the almighty Lavos!{line break}
How dare you oppose me?! HOW DARE YOU?!{full break}
(If Magus is in party)
{Magus}: You fool! Nothing can escape the fate of death!{full break}
{Magus}: Queen Zeal...a sad woman enthralled by Lavos, used{line break}
as nothing more than a pawn...how pitiful...{full break}
{Queen Zeal}: Cursed Prophet...or should I say Janus?{full break}
{Magus}: ...what?!{full break}
{Queen Zeal}: Did you think I would not recognize my own{line break}
son when you revealed yourself to Lavos?! You betrayed me{line break}
with your sins at the Ocean Palace, Janus!{full break}
{Magus}: You betrayed yourself, mother, and the kingdom!{full break}
...and you betrayed everything father stood for!{null}
{Queen Zeal}: The Kingdom of Zeal will live for all{line break}
time as part of the legacy of the almighty Lavos!{full break}
{Magus}: No...no it won't. Lavos just used you, mother! And{line break}
when he's done with you, he'll just tear you up and{line break}
cast you away. You mean nothing to "him"!{full break}
{Magus}: I won't let this go on any longer! I'll put an end to
this once and for all by my own hands!{full break}
(1st PC in party in order listed below speaks)
{Marle}: ...Janus...?{full break}
{Lucca}: {Magus}...?{full break}
{Frog}: ...{Magus}...even I sympathize...{full break}
{Robo}: I sympathize with you, {Magus}.{full break}
{Queen Zeal}: Oh, you will, Janus? No! You will atone for your{line break}
sins with your death!{full break}
(If Magus is not in party)
{Queen Zeal}: May you die and regret this folly of rebellion{line break}
for all time!{full break}
{Queen Zeal}: I-impossible! How could you mere mortals do this{line break}
to the likes of me?! Oh, almighty Lavos, I beseech you, give me your power!{full break}
*The Black Omen shoots energy into whatever surface is below it on the world map, depending on era it was taken on. Area where PCs are starts shaking.*
(All present speak in order listed below)
{Marle}: Uh-oh...{full break}
{Lucca}: Aw crap...{full break}
{Robo}: A massive energy reaction is building! The Omen may{line break}
disintegrate!{full break}
{Frog}: The Omen crumbles beneath us just as the Ocean Palace core did!{full break}
{Ayla}: ...?! Lavos come!{full break}
{Magus}: ...mother, you are a fool to the end...{full break}
{Queen Zeal}: Hahaha! HAHAHAHA! At last, the almighty{line break}
Lavos shall awaken! Before him, you are as helpless as{line break}
infants! What a delight!{page break}
Though my physical body dies, my spirit will live on for{line break}
eternity as part of the almighty Lavos! HAHAHAHA!{page break}
Immortality is mine atlast!{full break}
*the Black Omen disintegrates*
END "The Fated Hour!"
. . .
{Lavos}: I will not explain myself to mortal creatures. Your{line break}
limited intellect blinds you to the truths I speak!{page break}
Your conciousness is far too primitve to even begin to
understand the divine order of the Universe.{page break}
Again I ask you, why do you wish to destroy me? Why do
you wish to destroy your "god"?{full break}
*PCs draw weapons*
{Robo}: We cannot allow you to continue destruction of our Planet!{full break}
{Magus}: This is the end for you, Lavos!{full break}
{Lucca}: We can't let you live after what you've done to us, to{line break}
our world!{full break}
{Lavos}: Violence against me will be futile. But, even so,{line break}
if you wish to fight, then fight! This is a battle of{line break}
survival! That is the rule of nature, only the strongest
will survive!{full break}
. . .