Writing Critique

[chronotriggerfreak]

If you end the paragraph at "Go!" it becomes much clearer without having to over-use ellipses.

[V_Translanka]

I liked how it picks up on her former ellipses (makes more sense that way too). I thought that it was apparant, seeing how it was the same paragraph, who was speaking. Also, you'd have to end the paragraph at "GO!", not put it at the end, because Gil nods after, not before. So then you kick "Gil nodded..." or whatever to the start of the next paragraph (or to a completely seperate paragraph depending on what you want).

[chronotriggerfreak]

Also, you'd have to end the paragraph at "GO!", not put it at the end, because Gil nods after, not before. So then you kick "Gil nodded..." or whatever to the start of the next paragraph (or to a completely seperate paragraph depending on what you want).

Um, yeah man, that's exactly what I said. I never said to re-arrange anything, just end the paragraph at "Go!"

[V_Translanka]

Meh, I stand by my previous assumption that it could have been the way I thought you were saying it...Be clearer!



Eye-Row-Nee?

[chronotriggerfreak]

I was extremely clear... if I had said "with" instead of "at" I could understand, but you're obviously just dumb.

...

Just kidding.

[Radical_Dreamer]

Unless there are any objections, I'm gonna post the chapter in the main story thread. Oh, and how do I get the font size for the title set?

[chronotriggerfreak]

Use the handy-dandy "Font size:" selector directly about the middle of your text entry area.

(I.e., click on the font size menu, yo.)

[Radical_Dreamer]

Cool. Size 18 I presume?

[chronotriggerfreak]

Looks like it. But don't forget the bold!

[V_Translanka]

Is there a set size? I'm fairly sure I've seen one or two variations...

[chronotriggerfreak]

The bold is not set, as it seems to depend on whether you're a Symmetrist or a Zealitian ( ), but of the 20 or so posts already made, only 2 have used a different size than 18 (large).

[Symmetry]

Wow, must have taken some pretty painstaking research to dig up those statistics.

Be sure to keep us informed as more data becomes availible!

[Leebot]

For Claado:

His name was Serian. He was a skilled hunter, 6'2", with a mostly human appearance. From a distance, even, it was hard to tell the difference between him and anybody else. But when you started to see the details, the separations - physical and otherwise - were very apparent.

[Leebot]

Symmetry:

And she has the nerve to lecture me about social grace! What’s with mother acting all cheery all of sudden, anyway? Was it too much to ask for her to be pleasant to me, too? Gah! The young lady continued to fume, her angst running wild in her mind until she could take no more – she couldn’t take being in her mother’s presence a second longer. “Um, you two will have to excuse me, I need to step outside for a moment.”

[Claado Shou]

For Claado:

His name was Serian. He was a skilled hunter, 6'2", with a mostly human appearance. From a distance, even, it was hard to tell the difference between him and anybody else. But when you started to see the details, the separations - physical and otherwise - were very apparent.

Well...I'm not too sure on this one, so I'll just change it for readers' sake.